Some say some utilization of camera directions by the screenwriter
is okay, just as long as its limited and the screenwriter is unable
to find another way of expressing what they’re writing. I’ve been
in the screenwriting trenches with studios and indies, and I have
to say that whatever camera direction or camera directions are
used by the screenwriter, the camera directions will be changed
when the shooting script is being written.
So, what you’re doing works. However, utilizing your creativity
in place of camera direction will be more impressive to the
producer, director and actor if you avoid camera directions. In
this way, the screenwriter will not be insulting these people
and/or showing amateurism.
So, in place of using CAMERA, something like this:
INT. HIROKO’S OFFICE – DAY
Hiroko aims her eyes at a name holder on her desk.
HIROKO
Hiroko…
Hiroko quits articulating her name. She looks at Simon,
then eyes the name holder. Simon looks at the name
holder.
INSERT
Name Holder shows
HIROKO YAKISHIMA
BACK TO SCENE
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
By doing it this way, it builds confidence in the reader,
whereas camera directions, can lose your reader right
away.
I hope this is help to you.
Best Regards,
Donald L. Vasicek
Olympus Films+, LLC
The Zen of Writing
http://michaelc.nextmp.net/wordpress
dvasicek@earthlink.net